fog...
snowbound piers
a mirage of ghosts
sudden flood
light
leaps into sky
volcanic dust...
the river
skin disease and warts
| Copyright © 2019 by Michael H. Brownstein Michael H. Brownstein’s volumes of poetry, A Slipknot Into Somewhere Else and How Do We Create Love?, were published by Cholla Needles Press in 2018 & 2019, respectively. |
Michael, I suspect that haikus are supposed to be more “imagisitic,” like these of yours, than “wordplayful,” like the recent one from Goines?
ReplyDeleteGoines walked home from the gym along the road that led to the Japanese candy manufacturing plant. He guessed that destination explained one item of litter among the many that disrespected the roadsides, its identity a gift for verse:
crumpled box along the road
proclaims its contents
“Hi-Chew”
Oftentimes my haiku pieces are rejected because one simple image does not correlate with a second. Fog is the first image, then the ghosts, for example. Volcanic dust doesn't really become a river--but, in my mind, the two images blend.
ReplyDeleteThank you for your connent. It helped me navigate my haikus.